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5 prototype bars for your pleasure! feed back please!
Short for lyrics take a look in my book,
Bish bash bosh their of the hook,
Out of this world must be from mars,
Pages full of the worlds best bars,
Smash up the scene like a lyrical general,
Just let loose like a dog out its kennel,
Up on the mic turn up the treble,
Pick up the bass are u on my level?

Always forgive your enemy’s but never forget their names,
Sick of people in my head playing stupid games,
To get on in your life you’ve gotta be head strong,
Only you can no where you are going wrong,

The judge and jury stood to attention,
That young boy is gunna get a life sentence,
Crimes committed, to disgraceful to mention,
Spreading crimes into the 10th dimension,
Inside that jail you will pay your penance,
Was it all fake or just a cruel intention?

Uno dos trez,
Are you ready for the sesh?
Wicked bass and melody I rinse it with the best,
With my tightly written rhymes I’m ripping up the scene,
Stafford mc rolling this, I’m rolling it keen,
With my new rough neck style we flow like a stream,
You ask me is this a dream?
The answers no it’s what it seems!

Bought a ticket to a rave,
Transcended to that higher plain,
Producing vibes that u all crave,
Hard bass pumping through your vein,
That’s your fault it’s not mine,
Don’t be so god damn insane,
Hurry or you’ll miss your train,
Lyrical style fuck’s up your brain,
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Posted Thu 24 Apr 2008
They should all be 4, 8 or 16 liners. A six liner would fall short at a drop I imagen. Some of them are good but lack abit on certain parts and I don't really see anything that I'd consider deep. But I guess I don't know you so I wouldn't know if it really ment something.
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Posted Thu 24 Apr 2008
I Agree with Judge...

Do more word play as well ;)

Like... Mate Pay attention before i mention what you did to your mum last night yeah mate whatever i ain't after a fight just think ur gf is tight an wanna loosen her up for the rest of the night
RIP
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Posted Thu 24 Apr 2008
ur comments are noted for future lyrics :D for more meaningfull lyrics check previous posts :D
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Posted Thu 24 Apr 2008

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